Thursday 27 October 2016

My Magic Box Poem


7 comments:

  1. Kia Ora Dakota, my name is Kyra from Grey Main School. I like your poem because most of the colors are easy to read. This reminds me of doing poems. Maybe next time you could stick with maybe three colors so it is easier to read.

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    1. Hi I'm Dakota from Karoro School. Kia Ora Kyra. Thanks so much for commenting on my blog. Next time I will stick to three colours. What sort of poems do you do?

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  3. Kia ora its Morgan here from mamaku 2 in grey main. When I read that poem I thought that poem is so cool When I get home I am going to make one. I really like how you made the box ice and its as sharp as a knife.

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    1. Hi Morgan its Dakota here from Karoro School.The Magic Box poem is probably my favourite poem I've ever done in my life. Are you going to make a Magic Box poem when you get home?

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  4. Hi Dakota,
    I really like your writing. You have a really good imagination.
    You made me hungry when you said, “A piece of pizza straight from the oven.”
    I like that I can see your words really well. Good idea for a black background.
    Next time I think that you should make the words bigger. Also that you should keep all of your sentences one colour.
    You did a great piece of writing.

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    1. Hi Caitlyn its Dakota here from Karoro School. It also made me really hungry when I wrote the part:a piece of pizza straight from the oven.Next time I will keep my sentences the same colour and I will make my words bigger.

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