My Taniwha-Writing

For the past few weeks we have been practising using descriptive language in our writing. We have been trying to 'paint pictures with words'. We all got to invent our own Taniwha. We all drew our own Taniwha and the we had to write about it and describe what it looks like, what we do with our Taniwha and what our Taniwha is like. Then we read our work to a buddy and they had a go at drawing our Taniwha.

Create and Describe Your Own Creature

(Nogard-Taniwha)

WALT: be descriptive in our writing.  

Look at the description of a Nogard.  Now Create and describe your own creature that you will then be able to read to a buddy so that they can draw it.  Your description must be as detailed and clear as possible so that when you share it with others they will be able to visualise and draw you creature. Use lots of adjectives (describing words - big, small, round, green).

You must .....

• Have a name for your creature
• Start from the big things and work your way to the smaller things
• Describe the shapes
• Describe its neck, body, tail, wings etc.
• What does its head look like?Think about its eyes, nose, eyebrows, mouth, teeth
• Describe its legs/flippers/fins etc.
• What colours is it?
• Any extra details on the body like scales, spikes etc.
• Keep it simple and clear!
• Use correct punctuation and spelling.
• Check that your sentences make sense.

Remember that a good writer ‘paints’ pictures in their reader’s head with words.   This is what good descriptive writing does.  

Create your piece of writing here. Dakota

KATIPO!

Have you ever read a story about a Taniwha? I have! I even have my own Taniwha called Katipo...My Taniwha has a side ways koru shaped body (the top of the koru is the head). My Taniwha also has a wonky drawn-out tail. The colour of the tail is dark blue. The body is light red and the head is dark red. My Taniwha has one wing. The wing has 3 points and is placed just over the body. The points of my Taniwha’s wings are dark kikorangi and the rest of the wings are combined kikorangi and whero. My Taniwha also has a dark blue collar that is about an inch and a half wide. My Taniwha looks like an eel - tuna. My Taniwha’s eye is blue with a black cross going through the eye. My Taniwha has three white teeth. My Taniwha is outlined in black. My Taniwha lives in an underground cave in the Cook Strait and is fierce to people I haven’t introduced him to. When I’m not at school I am normally with Katipo-my Taniwha. We go flying high, Smash  into the  kapua! My Taniwha and I often go to our favourite place. Me and my Taniwha’s favourite place to go is to the Arahura river. My Taniwha and I have had heaps and heaps of adventures there !Once we found a huge piece of pounamu as big as an elephant's tamaiti. It was so big that we had to leave it in the river because we couldn’t carry it home!    

  

  

My taniwha.                                                                               

Lily’s drawing of my taniwha.

Peer Evaluation   Name of Peer:  lily

What I think you did well:  explaining your plan very well and having it all set out.

What I think you could improve on:  maybe next time you could say it more clearer and maybe we could get the exact same next time.

Self Evaluation

What I think I did well: I think I did well at putting lots of verbs.

What I could improve on: Punctuation.